I’ve always believed that one challenge of writing is distinguishing between what’s in your head and what actually makes it into the world. You know what you’re trying to say (presumably), but your words don’t always say it. Thus your reader or listener is left with one question: “Huh?”
Consider this sentence from a local politician’s newsletter:
Another portion of the East River Esplanade collapsed despite securing more than $275 million as Co-Chair of the Taskforce with Congress . . .
Ungrateful Esplanade! It collapsed despite securing so much money, though perhaps it was unreasonable to ask an esplanade to serve as co-chair of a Taskforce. Also, I have to sympathize with the rubble pile: we’re all on the verge of falling apart these days.
Then there’s this statement on the website of an airline I frequently patronize:
We’ve instituted a workstation cleaning program for the check-in lobby counters and gate counters where the surfaces are wiped down with a disinfectant at a frequent cadence.
A cadence is a “musical beat,” “voice modulation,” or “horse’s gait.” It’s not a time interval, and it can’t be frequent. I can only hope the airline staff’s antiviral efforts are more effective than their communication skills.
Then there’s this sign, courtesy of my friend Sean, by way of his friend Tom:
Sadly, the incoherence of this red-and-blue message seems to be the norm these days, when an esplanade has a tantrum and a cleaning product a cadence. One message I hope is crystal clear: stay safe!
Brilliant! That Esplanade certainly had some nerve, collapsing as it did right in our neighborhood!
Maybe if we’d made it full chair, not co-chair, it would have behaved better.
The signs and sentences are getting so as “huh?” as 2020 is “huh!”
Regarding the signs and sentences, is it just an overuse of the poetic freedom outside the poetic works?
I think these extend beyond poetic license, or poetic freedom. Still, it’s always good to consider whether that’s the author’s intention. Thanks for your comment.
Very clever
And I agree, if no one else wants to take responsibility–let the esplanade be the fall guy
Very clever
I agree, if no one else wants to take responsibility–let the esplanade take the fall
Love your comment! “Let the esplanade take the fall,” indeed!
Good grief! Gerri, these are worthy of a Friday Follies post! But I will not frequent the same cadence as you! 😀
You can frequent my cadence anytime, Ellie!